ONE FLOOR UP!

I was cleaning out the entertainment armoire the other day, shocker I know, and I came across my old Joe Scruggs Deep In The Jungle DVD.

IT. IS. AWESOME.

And once you listen to those songs, you will be singing them for days.

FOR. DAYS!

But it’s all good, because who wouldn’t want to sing to this Deep In The Jungle?

If you just clicked on that link you can thank me later on tonight when you’re making dinner and still singing….

“NANNY NANNY BOO BOO you can’t catch us
Even if you wanted to.
NANNY NANNY BOO BOO you can’t catch us
NANNY NANNY BOO BOO to you.”

You’re Welcome.

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I have a confession.

I wasn’t going to write a Valentine’s Day story for Susanna Leonard Hill’s Third Annual Valentiny Contest. Then I was. Then I wasn’t. Then I did. Then I erased it. I wrote another. It was awful. I ate some chocolate and drank a cup pint of coffee and watched Mr. Scruggs and the jungle animals a few hundred times and things got better.

Until Crocodile showed up.

And then he was oh-so persistent so I had to oblige and put him in the story. He said it was only fair seeing how he was a lonely crocodile now that all the monkeys were gone. (I reminded him this was due to his own inability to control his hunger/anger, but whatever!)

So…….

Here it is. My entry into Susanna’s Valentiny Contest.

It’s a valentine theme and includes a hopeful character, both requirements.

It’s 213 words. Because, well, it had to be 214 or less!

It has a Lion, a Flamingo, and of course…Crocodile. He says “Hello!”

He made me say that.

It is also a deliciously dark tale. Crocodile’s favorite kind.

 

ONE FLOOR UP

(WC 213, Ages 4-12)

By: Angela Hawkins

 

Lion lurked one floor up from Flamingo.

One floor separating a hopeful beast from a fetching feathered Ave.

One floor up,

Lion finalized his plan.

One floor up,

Lion strung enticing puffy pink hearts and red ribbon bows.

One floor up,

Lion diced and chopped in famished preparation.

One floor up,

Lion polished his dangerously sharp teeth and styled his whiskers for the feast.

One floor up,

Lion secretly sent the invitation

one

floor

down.

Flamingo’s heart fluttered as she read the intriguing words…

Please join me for a tasty Valentine’s Dinner!

One floor up.

Love – Your Secret Admirer.

Flamingo flamboyantly fluffed her pink cotton-candy feathers, then hastily skedaddled up the stairs.

One floor up,

Lion keenly waited for his guest to arrive.

One floor up,

Knock! Knock! Knock!

Fierce and starved, Lion flung open the door with a mountainous “Roooaaarrr!”

But instead of a flavorsome Flamingo, an uninvited Crocodile stood licking his chops. “Great crickey, mate!” he snapped. “You nearly frightened the jungle out of me!”

Lion’s tummy whimpered as the last pink cotton-candy feather fell from Crocodile’s nose.

“Oh dear,” burped a remorseful Crocodile. “I fear I have ruined your Valentine’s Day dinner plans.”

“I’ll say!” retorted a rather rankled Flamingo. “Haven’t you two ever thought about just ordering a pizza?”

THE END

 

Well, there ya go! That’s the sort of story you get when you let Crocodile make demands!

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Ready for more? Head on over Here for more great contest entries!

Happy, Happy Valentine’s Day! valentinebanner-pink-heart

 

 

20 Comments Add yours

  1. I’m glad flamingo got a word in edgewise there at the end. And as for that crocodile, I can see that it’s not related to Snappsy the alligator, because Snappsy would never insinuate himself into any book, right? Tasty story! Good luck in the contest!

  2. Lynn says:

    Now, there’s a surprise ending for you! 🙂 I wish you well with this story.

    1. Thanks for reading, Lynn!

  3. Love your pesky crocodile. What a great Australian personality. This is really cute. Good luck.

    1. Crocodile can be rather charming at times, not when he’s swallowing up pink feathery flamingo’s, but still… 🙂 Thanks for reading!

  4. fspoesy says:

    Nice slow build up of tension and unease as we try to determine Lion’s true intentions. And the Aussie lingo from the Croc is perfect. Good luck with the contest!

    1. So glad you liked it! Thanks for reading!

  5. Gabi Snyder says:

    Great twist at the end, and I love Croc’s Aussie accent.

  6. I prefer pizza over flamingo too. =) Good luck!

    1. Pizza is always the answer! 🙂 Thanks for reading, Gregory!

  7. jhkmom4 says:

    Ha! I loved the ending! It was unexpected for sure. Best of luck!

    1. Glad you liked it! Thanks for stopping by!

  8. hilarymb says:

    Oh dear that was unexpected … but fun – and I’m glad to read they all enjoyed the pizza! Cheers Hilary

    http://positiveletters.blogspot.ca/2018/02/the-robin-who-hedges-her-choices.html

    1. So glad you liked the surprise! Thanks for reading!

  9. jeanjames926 says:

    Glad you decided to write that story after all. This was a lot of fun!

    1. Glad you liked it! Thanks for reading!

  10. Hahaha! Dark indeed, Angie 🙂 Love that Lion got a surprise for his dastardly plan and that pizza is the answer to everything 🙂 Thanks so much for joining in the contest fun! I’m glad you did!

    1. Dark can be fun too, right? Oh, and Crocodile said to tell you thanks for holding this little contest, otherwise he’d still be swimming around stalking silly-nilly monkeys! 🙂

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